Showcase feedback 19th Feb

Monologue:
Movement
1) Stand straighter! Shoulders pushed back.
2) Pacing too much and makes the character look uncertain
3) Touch the tomb more!
4) Vary hand actions more (not just open arms/one hand gestures/ touch self)

Voice
1) Angry= fast =loose enunciation. Dont do that! Keep the pace, enunciate better.
2) Play with volume- extreme soft, soft, medium, loud, extermely loud, scream...
3) Need to see more Despair!!!- perhaps even to the point where your voice seems to break
4) Try high and low, loud and soft for same emotions. (see which one is best)
5) Try using the argumentative lyric style for "pious...impious"
6) Pause after imp parts to let the message sink in.

Costume
1) Wedding dress + veil?

General
1) Be BIGGER!!!- railing against the God's
2) No matter what the emotion, tone, volume, it must be level 10! Intense!

Duologue
Movements
1) Try to remain standing (1st time i stand) when drinking.
2) Cigaratte, learn how to use one! Ash.
3) Create more character traits and ticks. Make the necklace thing more obvious.
4) Hands too 'flowy' both mother and daughter.
5) Mother-daughter touching awakward! Not right for the relationship

Voice
1) "I hope i've always done that"- said in a childish 'i feel hurt' tone.
General
1) Try out different levels and kinds of anger
- At myself for having raised such a daughter
- At Amy for making such a horrid choice and being so stubborn about it
- At Dom cause he's taking my daughter away from me, cause he's a playboy who has little potential and because he doesnt appreciate the theatre.
Get motivations ad subtext V CLEAR.
How are these anger's different from each other. How will i show these differences?
2) Where is the climax?
3) Could add more reflective/introspective moments to Esme.
4) Change intensity of response to Amy. From- 'I need a drink!' to "Why? Why?" sliently playing in her head.
5) End-make it more obvious that Amy is the adult, that she knows what she is doing. Sort of control shift.

Miss N's comments
1) Pace- Swallowing words
2) Smoking weird
3) Keeps standing up
4) Reaction- revelation
5) Sarcasm more than concern. Monotonous.